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Comments from darthel0101
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2014-01-18 17:09:04 | Trucker's Joy | I voted pos but although the comment option was available, I had apparently been logged out. now I am unable to correct the anon vote and do a logged in vote. DRAT |
| 2014-01-18 17:54:24 | Becky's Gang-bang | decent story line and even the rape sections are not near as horrific as they could be but more of a domination play using blackmail as the incentive. I do not know where the negative vote came from but I will do my best to counter it. |
| 2014-01-18 18:04:38 | Carol_(1) | I almost called bullshit on the comment about taking I-10 north - even interstates run E-W while odds run N-S but the 10 DOES run NW from Tuscon to Phoenix when I actually found a map. IMO, the story was broken by the end of the post and should have been continued here instead of in a separate chapter, but … This is STILL worthy of a positive vote |
| 2014-01-18 18:12:49 | Carol II: It Runs in the Family | ya limited the comments and STILL got spam - whatcha gonna do. IMO, the beginning of this story needed to be at the end of the preceding one to close that story out but with the stories being published so close together, it should not matter to the reader. This story is STILL worth a positive vote. Thank you for sharing. |
| 2014-01-22 04:52:13 | JANET THE STRIPPER | Two minor points: - - The wall of words is off-putting - try breaking the story into visible paragraphs by breaking individual thoughts into their own paragraph and then putting an extra blank line between the paragraphs themselves. - - More description - you had a lot of visual description but almost no tactile or taste. The different senses will add length and time reading to your story as well as depth. Other than the points above, your story was well written. I would enjoy seeing more of your work. |