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Comments from darthel0101
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2014-07-28 14:06:47 | Awakenings_(2) | I will agree with bird that this story shows promise. The only problem is that it sounds stilted when reading it. |
| 2014-07-28 14:18:40 | Awakenings 2_(0) | The writing is smoothing out and the plot developing nicely. I hope to see much more of this story. |
| 2014-07-28 14:33:06 | Awakenings 3_(0) | Now just what are you doing with Helena? Don't you know that you're supposed to leave some time between introducing a character and foreshadowing their part in the plot? LOL |
| 2014-07-30 19:51:35 | THE GIFT_(6) | This story is not erotic but I refuse to withhold my vote. It was a well played little tale of the near-macabre which turned bright at the end. Well done and thank you for sharing. |
| 2014-04-13 13:44:10 | The Troll | not my cuppa, but not near enough for a neg. decent colloquialism from what I can see. |