| 2015-01-26 22:59:08 |
Don't Change - Chapter 2
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If our Hero does get the alien girl pregnant, then does it mean we have a common ancestor ? |
| 2015-01-26 23:10:19 |
Glorified Innocence - Chapter 1
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A very sweet & cute story of the first kiss. |
| 2015-01-26 23:32:54 |
Accidental Daddy - Chapter 2
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" quick care together " The business name is usually capitalized. Quick Care. I missed it and had to read back to where this odd couple was walking near 7:00 A.M.I am not a morning person so just for me it was bizarre. |
| 2015-01-31 04:50:36 |
Deneuralized Pussy III: The Pizza Girls First Time
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The formatting, paragraph spacing is all very confusing. You need an editor. Like saying you need an auto mechanic. |
| 2015-01-27 02:56:38 |
Birthday Present_(3)
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Maybe your story was produced on a smart phone? The format is appalling and confusing. Where did a paragraph begin and end ? Some writers use PART 1 etc with spacing to give order & flow to their story. Did you work from an outline ? |