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Comments from pyroclast
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2015-09-06 09:47:30 | In the family (part 3) | Pleasant story, with all the tension of a couple of young people experiencing their growing sexuality. I am looking forward to further development; and sensible pregnancy avoidance - they are not sterile! A spell checker would help you considerably, and please consider a writing course to learn the craft. |
| 2015-08-31 15:36:44 | Availability for work auction part one | "Outer vaginal lips"? You mean "VULVA", the external female sex structure? Yeah, I know, the Yanks have this sexual phobia of using the names used by the rest of the English-speaking world, particularly of female bits, like "vulva" and "arse", but why you? |
| 2015-08-26 12:34:41 | Amish No More - Chapter 3 | Shaved vagina? Surely, shaved VULVA? And pushing her face into a vagina? Lotta stretching involved there. And "off of" is so trashy, but the storyline is good. |
| 2015-08-27 12:00:49 | Under My Thumb | Please, please stop using that common "off of" expression, it grates horribly with the tone of your writing. |
| 2015-08-27 12:44:06 | Agent 99 | Ahhh, some people! Anonymous reader 2008-11-29 00:17:25, what a dickhead. Beagle, your stories are great; get the spelling right, the tense of verbs right, correct those "off of" abominations, and you will go places. I thoroughly enjoy reading your output, but occasionally shudder at the grating of the flaws. |