| 2019-11-06 12:21:41 |
Helping with college preperations
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Great. Scenario. Details awesome! U surely know how how how to hold reader's interest. Grammar, plot,storyline, details of action,everrything supurbe! U should get a book publishhed. Good luck for great things to cum Ur way! |
| 2019-11-07 03:22:38 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 2
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Hawkrider, MUCH, much better. Even without hot throbbing passions. Short like a chapter, not a long short story. |
| 2019-11-07 04:27:29 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 3
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I noticed that the 3 fuckers had the idea of a foursome but forgot too tell Heath in time to prevent the "parting" that took place. I've lost 2 sisters, a wife, a house, Mom & Dad, Cousins, Aunts & Uncles. I guess I was never close enough to any of them to quit living myself. Death is a part of life just like insurance & taxes. I guess I'll just keep on breathing until I stop breathing & my heart stops. |
| 2019-11-08 00:30:10 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 7
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Another "Cliff Hanger". Hawk, U do it as well or better than anyone else. The Reader has to find out what's going to happen to our "Hero Heath". I agree, everyone is looking for Heath to pick up from the past & he's looking ahead for everything even though any variation whatsoever reminds him of past betrayal. |
| 2019-11-08 12:49:47 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 11
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Hawk, U've made life so beautiful in this series.With all the storms & disappoints Heath has had to go thru, babies (and making then) goes a long way to help overcome life's hardships. Another good thing, with his business savvy,, he doesn't have to worry about feeding & clothing them. With this son nephew, hard will it be for him to accept his daughter & other nephew? Looking forward to Future chapters. |