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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2018-09-18 03:38:45 | The Rocker Part 1_(6) | this is a good start. Personally, I didn't lose my virginity until I was 22 and a half, and I wound up introducing that girl to her first husband two years later. About 15 years after that, we got married. After 13 years of marriage and two kids, she divorced me. Aside from that, and a love of Classic Rock, That's about DW and I have in common. At least, HE got a musical break AND two REALLY HOT women to take care of his sexual needs.... I'm looking forward to reading the rest of Ddub's story in the upcoming (upCUMMING?) chapters. Keep up the good work!!! |
| 2018-09-18 04:41:17 | The Rocker Part 2_(3) | DBuck, have you acquired an Editor yet? If not, i would like to volunteer my services. I am well-versed in the structure of the English language, and my spelling and punctuation are impeccable. I just have trouble writing good stories.... Part of your problem is that there are NO CLUES as to who is saying what in many of your paragraphs. An Editor, even a mediocre one like me, can make your story flow more smoothly. Let me know if you're interested.... In the meantime, keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of DW's adventures.... |
| 2018-10-10 16:44:34 | A Genius in King Arthur's Court Ch. 12 | If Nimue's Lake is still there in England AND not overly polluted, perhaps Dave and Maddie could check in with their friend and benefactor and see what needs to be done to further correct the timeline. I'm sure that minor changes happened that may cause MAJOR changes to Future History. Just Dave's BEING in 10th century England had to change SOMEthing relatively trivial that could have a major impact a few thousand years further ahead.... |
| 2019-01-29 07:41:02 | L.I.S.S.A. C | An excellent first chapter. Usually, what happens here is that second chapters are rushed and suffer because of the rushing. Then, because of the poorer quality of Chapter 2, the approval goes down, which discourages the author, and the full story never gets finished. Take your time, make each chapter count, and don't allow the commenters to force you to produce an inferior product for the sake of posting chapters. Be true to yourself and the story that you are creating. I'm looking forward to the next part. Make it a good one.... |
| 2019-02-06 22:33:05 | The Seductress Nextdoor | Thanks for a good story. Well thought out, well written. I wish I'd had a neighbor like that when I was growing up. But if I had, she probably would have gone after my brother.... |