| 2013-04-28 18:21:56 |
The Best Week Ever
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Excellent start and very erotic. Teens beginning to experiment with sex is definitely an arousing theme. I will be watching for the coming chapters to appear. |
| 2013-05-19 21:19:48 |
Victoria's sex crazy
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Not bad for a first try. But you need to correct all those many writing errors before you submit a story. If you can't do so, then get someone else to do the proofreading and editing. Also, you can improve your stories by putting much more graphic detail in your descriptions of sexual activity. In this story, the sex seemed rather rushed. |
| 2013-05-22 04:34:09 |
i Fucked My Again part2
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Sorry, but it got to be way too much of a chore to read through all those gross errors and poor writing. |
| 2014-06-15 07:29:15 |
Amanda's Dad at the Gloryhole
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I'm another one who has read that same story once before on this site a couple years back. |
| 2014-10-29 01:11:40 |
My Girlfriends Daughter_(1)
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It was a good story but I have one criticism. The stepdad should have been more astute about birth control. There is no way that a girl who has already developed B-cup breasts would not have already started her menstrual cycles and become fully fertile. The possibility of unwanted teen or pre-teen pregnancies are a serious problem and shouldn't be taken lightly. |