| 2019-04-14 10:57:28 |
A Hot Day Chap 6 ~ 11
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Chapter 11 looks like it got cut off. |
| 2019-04-20 10:58:31 |
Discovering My Daughter_(1)
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Serious editing required. Some punctuation to indicate sentences would help the flow of the story. |
| 2019-05-02 11:21:45 |
My little sister Lily, Chapter 3: Life with Danny
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The contraction of "you are" is "you're" not "your". |
| 2019-05-02 11:32:02 |
Dicovering my Daughter Part II
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Punctuation to dente the end os sentences would be nice. |
| 2019-05-07 10:18:51 |
Young and Single_(1)
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The capitalizing of random words and the change of perspective in the narration from first person to third is awkward. Good story otherwise. |