| 2020-04-22 12:18:33 |
Megan's Diary: helping out a friend
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You need to keep the tense of the narration consistent. Either a first person or third person narration. Also a proof read to catch the minor spelling errors helps also. |
| 2020-04-26 18:07:42 |
Showing Thanks to My Gymnastics Coach
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Great story, there are a couple of spots where the narration flips from first to third person. |
| 2020-05-18 11:55:57 |
Principal Urges
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Great story. Some editing would improve the read. Keeping the tense consistent is one of them. |
| 2020-05-20 12:04:42 |
Naked Day - part 18 Bacchanalia, Act 2
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Great story. There is only one error and that there is an inconsistency on who is narrating - Time or a third person. |
| 2020-05-20 16:34:23 |
Naked Day - part 18 Bacchanalia, Act 2
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Part 18 only. |