| 2011-05-20 14:50:27 |
Learning a good lesson
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This is a good story. A little heard to read you need to put spaces in between your pargraphs. other than that it was a great story. |
| 2011-05-20 15:40:53 |
The love of my life.
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It was a very good story hope to see a part two to it soon. |
| 2011-05-20 23:38:41 |
My True Love
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For your frist story it was not bad. You need to work on your sotory line a bit more detal, and your story needs it be little longer and put spaces in between your pargraphs. You have a great frist draft just put a little more work in to it.You get 8 out of 10 just keep writing. |
| 2011-05-20 23:39:10 |
My True Love
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For your frist story it was not bad. You need to work on your sotory line a bit more detal, and your story needs it be little longer and put spaces in between your pargraphs. You have a great frist draft just put a little more work in to it.You get 8 out of 10 just keep writing. |
| 2011-05-21 14:35:24 |
My soul mate never thought to be
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This story has great potenchol you just need to work on your punctuation and runon sentences.If you rewrite it and anke the changes to it it will bw a lot better. Can't wate to read part two hope to see it out soon |