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| Date | Story title | Comment |
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| 2013-11-10 22:28:25 | Step Mom's Discovery Chapter 4 (Repost 5) | Give more notice when changing POV. I like the whole story though like the Idea that James is dominating his two lovers, like the feeling Stacy is like she being punished when James is only playing with her. Stacy awaking that she a sub and likes being degraded by her husband verbally. Hope to be reading more soon. |
| 2013-11-16 20:57:58 | My Stepfather 6 | I read the series I was not disappointed with your ending. I was surprised how much she took before leaving. Keep up the good writing. I do like it when a survivor comes out of a long struggle. |
| 2017-08-24 17:08:22 | Danny has fun with Mom and Older Sister | There is two things that make a reader (me) to first start reading a story and then continue reading it. 1.) Subject - you selected some of it, and rightfully so, but you may have one or two more to get more readers interested. 2.) The story itself - the story part is also broken down to two(2) things a.) Content - does the story and characters move me (the reader). This story and characters did, but you may want to expand on why the father was so opposed to the military. b.) Readability - Spelling, grammar, you the stuff you suppose learn in English composition classes. This is important, but given a choice between a good concept or perfect composition I would have concept. This is just my opinion though word and grammar check and a week or two before final proofreading may help improve your style without destroying the idea of the plot. |
| 2014-01-27 22:17:19 | Fulfilling my dreams pt.2 | yes pleas continue |
| 2014-03-16 18:08:55 | Your Brain is my slave: Part 10 - Nothing lasts forever | I read the entire series, all ten chapters. First thank you for finishing it. I do like the ending I prefer it to him getting the treatment or that it was him that was controlled only thinking he was in control. I do like the redemption aspect that started to nag at him thru out the story line. Very well thought out and written. Good luck on more stories publish here or not. |