| 2016-02-26 12:01:28 |
The Summer Job I'll Never Forget - Part 1
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Hot story. Love older female/male stories. This was a good one and well done. Thanks for sharing. |
| 2016-02-26 12:03:16 |
Spending Time With Aunt Darla Pt. 1
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This was well-written. You made the right choice building up to the hot part, which made it hotter. Thanks for writing and posting this here. Continue the story, please. |
| 2016-02-26 20:41:16 |
The Resistance
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Very well-written and intriguing science fiction. I would only advise that you use quotations in your next story to signify dialog. Thank you for this wonderful first part of what I think will be a fabulous story. Switching between two universes was unique and very original. |
| 2016-02-26 20:48:43 |
A Haunting
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Very good. Creepy and erotic. |
| 2016-02-26 20:57:20 |
The Rest Stop: Part 3
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First letter of dialog should be capitalized as if it were a separate sentence because it is. And some quotation marks were missing. But then you already stated that you hurt your hand and were sort of handicapped when typing this so that's understandable. As for the story itself, grammar issues aside, it was EXCELLENT. You captured the shock revelation of incest in your writing and horror at the unspeakable that has happened. Also the naughty feelings of incestuous lust and casual sexual encounters. Thank you for writing this. It was very interesting, sexy, and absorbing to read. Continue? DEFINITELY. |