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Comments from throatHER
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2020-06-06 06:48:05 | Wife Confesses Her Infidelity | A very hot read! Well done. |
| 2020-06-06 12:32:44 | Curious Siblings (Part 1) | This is a pretty good start for a first outing and you picked a subject that is very popular on this site. You had some minor punctuation issues that can be cleaned up with the more you read and write. I agree that the dialogue between the characters feels a little disjointed, but overall a good tale. |
| 2020-06-08 08:47:25 | Megan and Kyle - part 1 | A good story with nice character development but I do urge you to proofread your story a loud to yourself so you don't have so many errors. I know, it's a free website so who cares right? If you want to get better as a writer then you should care. Also, it seemed like the baby popped out of nowhere. Yes, it is plausible that the baby survived even though Emily didn't but there was no mention of it prior to him performing oral on Megan. Overall, a positive rating from me but make sure you look into the details to make your story greater. |
| 2020-06-09 03:44:57 | What a Difference a Summer Makes- Part 4B | I would just like to take this time out and give thanks to all who have read this series. I really appreciate how much you guys and gals are invested in this world that's been created. Part 4C will have many answers. The ending is in my head. I'm just trying to devise a good way to get there. Remember, this is ONLY junior year! So, this story is far from over. Thanks again for being patient with me. I will not let you down. |
| 2020-06-09 09:50:03 | HOBO Chapters 1,2 and 3 | Reading this tale it has elements of D-Buck's The Rocker series vibe to it which I thoroughly enjoyed. You show your talent in crafting a story with characters you come to care about such as Game of Inches. A pet peeve of mine is grammatical errors such as when and where to punctuation marks. It comes up quite a bit in your dialogue. Not a overly big concern but I just wanted to share since we are all trying to become better writers. For example: “Oh, I’m very sure.”, she replied, winking at me. The period should be replaced by the comma. It should be written: “Oh, I’m very sure," she replied, winking at me. A comma never comes after quotation marks. |