| 2018-08-02 03:53:13 |
A Dream or Fantasy
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Just right off the bat, it doesn't feel real. I'm single now, i guess i can visit with my cousin? Could he not while married?? Leaving food for cat in case gone for multiple days? It's only a 90 min drive. Btw we're nudists, just slipping that in. Could use some proofreading for typos. Ending with a dream, ok. Well, massive lack of detail. Bi-sexual/Gay content is not popular on this site. I caught hell for a "gay" scene in one of my stories. It had some decent main character background |
| 2018-08-02 03:56:23 |
A Dream or Fantasy
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Cont.. But not much background for cousin's daughter. Not enough to make me interested in a sequel. Not bad. Will get better with practice. |
| 2018-08-02 04:26:20 |
Mom's Cum Tribute
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How has no one commented on this yet? I am definitely voting for option number 1. Option 3 maybe after a few more chapters. This reminds me of the series Handjob Rewards. I love the teasing! But I will say that no one likes just a tease. Eventually, I'd like it to progress as far as possible. Maybe, the boys pity the poor son and blackmail the mother into taking his virginity. Maybe too rape like for you, but she doesn't seem like she would need that much coercing. Again though, I'd want something like that after several more chapters of option 1. |
| 2018-08-02 04:53:50 |
Cumming on Sister_(0)
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I thought it was pretty good. Not much narrative between facial and blow job, but not bad. Doesn't sound like there will be much narrative between bj and sex either. More detail would be nice. Personality isn't always that important. Fill in the blank type characters are fine as long as the actions and plot are good. Actions could use more detail. Plot could use more narrative. Hot story. |
| 2018-08-03 01:59:01 |
Mom's Cum Tribute
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Sounds fantastic! Still confused by the lack of feedback. Great story |