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Comments from wordytom
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2008-10-25 21:03:17 | House Sitting in Florida | Two things: 1. If you brought the feelings of the characters into the story more it would help. 2. Use more prose when you describe the settings. It helps. |
| 2008-10-25 21:20:35 | Melissa | There was very little story, just a lot of sex. |
| 2008-10-25 19:26:45 | The Second Meeting | Needs work |
| 2008-10-26 17:15:47 | H is for Harry | Too gimicky. Why not try to tell a straight story that starts at the beginning and stops at the end? The "D" was pure hoke. I apologize if I insult you, but I feel you have potential. Right now you are trying to be clever. Don't be clever until you first become a writer. I write and sell a few stories. If yours was crap I would have moved on and not bothered. Wordytom |
| 2008-10-26 17:26:20 | Sins of A Father Part 2 | Frankly your detractors should keep up with the world as it is. Over 80% of American families have incestuous experiences. Until the American Occupation after WW2 Young boys and girls were usually involved with their parents and grand parents. France, Sweden, Belgium and all the rest of Europe are so much more liberal than the Hypocrits who run this country, Hate fags and suck dicks in secret. Keep writing what you please. |