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Comments from wordytom
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2008-10-26 17:38:16 | Claire No.1 | It could be a really good story if you took the time to build it. |
| 2008-10-26 17:40:17 | Claire No.2 | If you want to write lesbian sex, first meet a lesbian. |
| 2008-10-26 18:31:24 | Boys Locker Room to My Room | This is barely deserving of a positive vote. Join a writing group. Learn to tell a tale. |
| 2008-10-26 18:40:23 | Boys Locker Room II | Look, you have a great story idea here and you seem to be working hard to create the teen girl's POV. You get A for rffort. However you should fill it in, rather than stream of conscious writing, try to fill the story in with background and feelings. If you are willing to make the effort you could be a very proficient writer. |
| 2008-10-26 18:45:36 | Me and my sister.PT 1 | Not enough continuity. the story staggers along and goes nowhere. |