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Comments from wordytom
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2008-10-31 12:18:22 | Houseboat Vacation - Part 3 | You have a good imafination. However you should leart the art of short story writing. I mean that in a nice way |
| 2008-11-07 17:47:13 | Inside Me: C02 | Suggestion, if you wish to try stream of consciousness writing, make it flow smoothly. For the amateur writer it is best to stick with straight narrative and let the story unroll event at a time. Good luck and keep writing |
| 2008-11-18 21:11:35 | The education of Kelly,part 1 | Too much wishful old man bragging and not enough story. |
| 2008-11-18 21:25:48 | Football Tournament 2 (7th grade boys having "fun") | boring |
| 2008-11-20 18:05:52 | Maryland Getaway Ch. 2 | pretty good |