| 2012-06-09 20:42:56 |
What Mary gets up to...... part 5
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This is REALLY GOOD, you turned me on so much with this - I'm really wet, and typing with one hand because the other is still pumping my pussy! This is even better than Part 1 (I skipped the intervening parts as not being entirely lesbian, so not my scene), in evety way - the scenario is more interesting and convincing, the description even better, and the sex really hot. Of course, I love older women seducing young girls stories (check out my own stories and you'll see what I mean), so you pressed my g-spot with this one. Another for my favourites list - where all the BEST lesbian stories go! |
| 2012-12-24 20:21:23 |
Mandi Part 1
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This was really convincing and I liked it a lot - I'm looking forward to the next part. |
| 2013-02-15 09:58:51 |
When the Teacher is the Pet, Part Two
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So hot, so hot, sooo HOT!!! I loved the first part, and this is even better. An added bonus is the theme you are setting up with little stepsister Jessie - I am really looking forward to seeing where you take that next. Your stories are always good, but I think this is your best yet - you get so well inside the mind of the blackmailed teacher that we really feel her churning emotions, and though of course this is a fantasy scenario the writing makes it real in the way that makes any sex story 100 times hotter. I've been away from the site for a few weeks, so finding this was a lovely welcome back - and it made me come, real hard and hot, at least three times (especially when her Mom comes home - a really believable and surprising twist!). Keep at that keyboard, honey, and gives us more, more, MORE! |
| 2013-03-11 21:42:45 |
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I enjoyed this: the one sure test is, did it get me wet and wide - yeah, you bet it did. I do love a good older-younger lesbian seduction in an office setting!! I liked the way that you wrote it, though once or twice I had to re-read a bit because the names seemed to be the wrong way round, and it does help the reader keep in the flow if you check it through a few times before posting the final version. Personally, I find that not only do I pick up on mistakes that I might have missed, but I also keep adding a bit more detail or an extra twist, and sometimes these end up as the highlights of the story. Anyway, thanks for a nice one, which I have added to my favourites list ... its where all the best lesbian stories go! |
| 2013-03-16 21:46:04 |
L&C school part 1 A young girls lesson in self discipline
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For a first story, Debbie, this is really good and has lots of promise - the description is vivid, the story is tightly focused on the action, and the narrator's emotions and sensations come across well. The bit with the knife handle was a neat touch, and quite original. You should definitely continue writing, and you'll find each time it comes easier (like some out things, lol). |