| 2009-07-27 19:07:41 |
Libba Mae
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good start! I cant stress enough about spacing making a story easier to read. But quite enjoyed it and has potential for other parts like the beastiality I am sure we will hear about eventually. Thanx for sharing! |
| 2009-07-22 00:03:11 |
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Yes Good Little Girl! Just like Oliver, "Can I have more?" |
| 2009-07-22 01:07:36 |
My first Time_(39)
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Well paragraphs always help for an easier read. A few spaces really help reading through a story. Hope you write more. |
| 2009-07-23 01:41:41 |
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Different yes - but a decent read though. I wouldnt do something lighter unless you want to. Write what makes you happy I always say. |
| 2009-07-23 23:59:29 |
Lily's last summer
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Interesting start - I hope the story continues and builds. |