| 2011-05-05 05:09:02 |
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The only good thing about reading this shit is that I get good clues to pass on to one of my friends who works for the FBI Special Victims Unit. Pedophile bastards deserve 10 years as Bubba's Bitch in Sing Sing or similar. |
| 2011-05-05 21:01:36 |
mysterious fuck at midnight
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Story is sexy and there the good comments end. PARAGRAPHS . . . .a solid block of text is hard to read. Hard to read stories are simply dropped. Space out the story with paragraphs and it becomes easy to read and appreciated. Read other stories and see how layout improves the story. Positive vote for the sexiness but personal 4/10 for crappy layout. |
| 2011-05-05 21:27:20 |
MY SISTER'S PUNCHING BAG PARTS 2 & 3 (REPOST)
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Yup, VERY enjoyable. Better be a Part 3. Positive vote and 7.5/10 as personal grade. |
| 2011-05-06 03:29:52 |
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Dapple, I'm not going to blow smoke up your ass and tell you this is the best story I have ever read, BUT, it is pretty fucking good. Positive vote of course, but there were a couple of places where sentences were too repetitive. Having said that I want to see more from you . . . .and I AM looking forward to it. Well written, well spaced and overall, easily read. Well done and thank you. 8.5/10 |
| 2011-05-06 03:35:48 |
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SD, I will admit I have read considerably worse stories than yours, and not too many better. You're good at giving each of your victims personality without using too many words to do it - and the theme of the story is original and interesting and the writing clear and well spaced. + vote and personal 8/10 |