| 2011-05-07 07:03:33 |
My new Bride part 4
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Hey Wantsomefun, This is Ghostrider939 and unlike the real wantsomefun whose name you plagiarize, you haven't written any stories and are too gutless to log in before slagging somebody. You are a defective little microbe. |
| 2011-05-07 21:15:01 |
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Sorry, my friend . . .If this story took five hours, then you wasted five hours. English is probably NOT your first language. You did not try to find out what your potential readers would like. If you did, you would break the story down into easily read paragraphs instead of a solid block of text. You categorised this as a TRUE story then added fiction, so it is not a true story . . .it is a fictitious story BASED in truth. Lastly, if you want to write stories in English, go back to school and learn to write in English, not in some hybrid pidgeon remotely related to English. If your primary language is English, then you obviously only went to school to smoke dope, do drugs and waste time. As it stands, this story is crap. |
| 2011-05-08 19:35:37 |
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Rebel, Well written story with spacing that makes the story easy to read. Well done and I'm looking forward to where this story is going. You have a knack for keeping up the suspense. + vote and personal 8/10 |
| 2011-05-08 23:22:14 |
Roses for Monica Part Two
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Love this story. Good boy Blue. Part Three Please....GR939 |
| 2011-05-08 23:24:05 |
Roses for Monica Part Two
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Sorry Rutger, Got my authors confused but comments and respect for good writing remain. GR939 |