| 2011-01-21 23:15:08 |
Dirty Little Love Secret_(1)
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Perfectly good story you really could feel the love between these two girls and you could really feel there love in the way you told the story. |
| 2011-01-23 02:29:33 |
My Daughter's Friend Natalia Part # 1 & # 2
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This was A great beginning to what I believe in fact am pretty much positive due to the fact of with the way U write ur stories U make it to where the reader actually believes tht they are A character in the story and if everyone will pardon me saying this if they don't get tht impression aftr or while rdng the story's thn they aren't reading it correctly or they just cant interpret A the story correctly with me the whole time I was reading it I wass really feeling like I was in this story and I was wishing that I was this girls father just so I could have all the stuff happening to him happen to me now tht shows great artistic storytelling technique. |
| 2011-01-23 02:30:47 |
My Daughter's Friend Natalia Part # 1 & # 2
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This was A great beginning to what I believe in fact am pretty much positive due to the fact of with the way U write ur stories U make it to where the reader actually believes tht they are A character in the story and if everyone will pardon me saying this if they don't get tht impression aftr or while rdng the story's thn they aren't reading it correctly or they just cant interpret A the story correctly with me the whole time I was reading it I wass really feeling like I was in this story and I was wishing that I was this girls father just so I could have all the stuff happening to him happen to me now tht shows great artistic storytelling technique. |
| 2011-01-23 02:56:43 |
My Daughter's Friend Natalia Part # 3 & # 4
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It takes A great deal of patience & artistic story telling talent to be able to write A story and have it published or posted on A internet story site and have 100's of ppl read it and belive every wrd as true if not. |
| 2011-01-24 18:10:17 |
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So far all the I have read are great story's I can actually imagine it being me in his position and even sometimes wishing it was there was A few things I noticed of error like A few times you called Ethan John other than that it was great can't wait to read more. |