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Comments from darthel0101
| Date | Story title | Comment |
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| 2013-01-29 19:36:34 | Modern Mage Chapter 23 | You mentioned your editing efforts - there is one that I was introduced to on this site which is extremely effective in finding what you are looking for: reading backwards. The reading against the regular flow allows you to see each word more clearly instead of seeing what you intended to put on paper and I have had more than one writer comment on its efficacy. RE the publishing of a work based in a copyrighted environment: check with the owners of the copyright for their possible allowance. If the characters which you use are not copyrighted the story can very possibly be allowed to be published as its dissemination can also build the game knowledge and spread. |
| 2014-09-11 16:53:47 | She is the One (Part 16) | Great chapter. Gotta wonder why ToucanPlay is continuing to read your work and BashfulScribe's if he is only gonna vote neg on it. I found no favorites listed when I checked his profile so apparently he doesn't like anything. |
| 2013-02-05 00:41:27 | “The Judgment of SGT. J”: A Short Introduction | I wish you well on your journey here and I hope that you are able to help others who have walked a path similar to yours. |
| 2013-02-08 13:50:11 | Warehouse Encounter | The paragraphs not being separated by extra lines made this a little hard to read. The switching POVs exacerbated that issue |
| 2013-02-10 16:12:46 | The Judgment of Sgt. J" Chapter One: “Kay‘s Demons take Shape” | Just a comment, an observation. It could be that reliving the episodes which Sgt J wrote of caused a relapse of the emotional trauma that he went through the first time. It could be easier leading him out of despair if this is true due to his having walked that path once before but it could also be harder as well. I wish y'all all the best that can possibly come from this and hope that the journey ends with success. Just know that the most critical judge that a man of honor ever has will be found sitting at the high bench of his heart. |