| 2015-03-26 22:05:16 |
Raising Peter, Chapter Ten
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Whilst the entire story is reasonably good, I personally think that you have concentrated too much on the sex, and not enough on the initial plot, too much sex makes the story rather boring and repetitious... |
| 2015-03-11 20:48:26 |
Brother does Bad things with the Queen Bee of the Hive_(1)
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what in gods name is this shit? absolute rubbish, take it down, a waste of space. |
| 2015-03-27 19:24:59 |
Last one to know, chapet to.
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you should read this yourself, then take it down and correct your grammar, then read it again and again till you fix it and then repost, as it is now the story is almost unreadable, definitely not up to normal standards...... |
| 2015-03-30 00:06:58 |
Adventures of Miracle Steve 3
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I am definitely putting you on my list of favourite writers, excellent story with very few MINOR mistakes, looking forward to more of steves adventures.. |
| 2015-03-30 23:32:11 |
The Battered Lamp Chapter Four: The Virgin of the Arcane
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whilst I like the story I personally think that you are losing the real plot and getting carried away with too much sex, |