| 2015-04-06 18:44:34 |
Something with my Sister Deb
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I really thought this was going to be fantastic, but for me it fell short. I really wanted to like it but when Debs said "I want you to eat me again" I had to back track I thought I was going nuts and I'd missed it, but you'd missed it, it wasn't good. I did like a lot of it especially the relationship between the siblings, I like it when they are caring towards each other, but that's just my preference. You could continue this but proof read aloud then you'll catch any slip ups. I have read one other of your stories which was great, so I'll definitely read more . Thanks xx |
| 2015-04-06 21:39:29 |
Edward: Motherly Love
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Wow , I loved that, I totally agree with the review underneath, my only criticism is, I would have loved more . This story was so much more polished than the story about ' sister Debs' , the story had everything I just loved it and it made me quite hot and hirny, very good. Thanks xx |
| 2015-04-07 19:49:58 |
My cousin and I_(6)
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Really needs more polish, quite hard to understand, thanks for the effort but didn't make me horny. Xx |
| 2015-04-07 21:44:36 |
Quickie at the Car Wash
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I really loved this, it was very titillating and such fun. I normally don't care for short stories but this one made me horny and laugh a great combo. Thanks for the great post. Luvsalik xx |
| 2015-04-07 21:55:43 |
Carriage Ride
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I loved it, it was very hot and horny. I love a guy with long hair though not quite waist length. The picture you painted was very intoxicating, it made me as wet as jasmine. Thanks for that. Lovesalik xx |