| 2016-07-21 14:45:52 |
The Homeless Peeper
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Good start for a longer story. Needs a bit more character development and detail. |
| 2017-02-17 22:05:07 |
A Happy End to High School, Part 5
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It can't end here! |
| 2017-07-12 13:05:38 |
My Baby Does the Hanky Panky - 1
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Nicely written and a hot tale (pun intended) well told. I hope to read more of your work. |
| 2017-07-12 13:27:37 |
I was Nervous_(1)
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Really enjoyed your story and your clear writing style. Excellent balance between detail and action make your characters live. It is really hard to find stories like this written from a girl's perspective, and I find the stories written by girls a huge turn on, but the stories written by guys pretending to be women rarely cut it. Please keep writing. The more you write, the better you get with both story lines and the mechanics of clear writing. Thanks for your work. |
| 2017-07-12 13:56:36 |
My Week With Tommy. PT.2
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Your English is superior to many other writers on this site whose native language is purportedly English. Your stories flow well, with enough detail to make the characters seem real and enough action to maintain interest. Please keep writing. You have talent, and will only get better the more you write. Thank you for posting. |