| 2016-01-20 02:51:06 |
Poker Night with Ma
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I'm intentionally vague with character descriptions. I, myself, like to imagine a woman to match personality types when I read stories, and I often find lengthy character descriptions somewhat annoying at times. It's like they are trying to dictate my fantasy. A little bit of description, I find ok, because then it's more like a suggestion to me. Or, the description can be functional, like breast size, height, hair length, ethnicity.. I don't mind that.. But a nice vague description allows you to put in your preferred imagined woman, with little interference from me. I hope that answers your question. She looks like what you want her to look like. |
| 2016-01-22 04:59:46 |
Losing The Super Bowl 2015
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It was definitely one crazy ball game, and this story is crazy hot! It's definitely one of my all time favorites. |
| 2016-01-27 07:13:07 |
I Had Always Wanted ..... Part 1
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People here do seem to have a thing for cheesey romance stories. I got bored pretty quickly and just kept thinking that no one talks like this in real life. it's very possible that it's just not the right genre for me. I won't down vote for being out of my genre and congratulate you on successfully gaining a high rating and readership. |
| 2016-01-27 07:39:31 |
Fine line part 1
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Typos could be avoided with spell check and a re-read of your work. And, breaking up your paragraphs and dialogue would make it a little easier to read. I'm also guilty of rushing a sex scene. The build up is the most important part in my opinion, but allowing extra detail and a lengthy description of the process allows one to believe the act of oral, or other sexual act, lasts more than just a few seconds. Good long build up gets people horny, and then a well described event gets people off. For many writers Sometimes the suspense is enough and sometimes the sexual act is enough, but I felt like you were lacking in both areas. Great first attempt though! Please keep writing! |
| 2016-01-30 05:32:18 |
Lust Part 2
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I hope there's more! I hate it when great series don't finish.. Like that dead bastard Miniwand... Hopefully not actually dead, so we can like kill him for not finishing.. |