| 2016-05-23 19:54:52 |
Potential Part 5
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LoL I found it and it was good. Finally, a bit of heterosexual action. Don't get me wrong, I love the girl on girl action, but I always want more. Your story set up is beautiful. Guy who is too old for girl who is too old for guy who is too old for girl.. The two in the middle don't know which way to go.. and you get some great drama.. add that to the friends don't date friend's siblings rule.. nice bit of tension.. the tension then released via the girl on girl and bestiality.. meanwhile, we sit on edge waiting for slip up.. who needs rules.. this is porn! but the longer potential stays just potential, the hotter it is.. as long as it eventually pays off... there have been a lot of disappointing authors who start out stringing us along with the most amazing stories.. and then they drop off the face of the planet ;_; |
| 2017-01-10 16:01:23 |
Potential Part 14
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Though to clarify, I've given nothing but positive votes to this series. I'd say I am a pretty generous critic. If I don't like a story for genre reasons, I don't vote at all. I can't stand romance, unless it's hard fought for. I imagine if I had an easier time with romance in real life, then I'd spend less time reading erotic fiction. Knowing your audience is part of the battle. |
| 2016-05-28 01:46:43 |
Potential Part 5
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Will do. |
| 2016-05-31 05:04:13 |
Potential Part 5
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Just finished chapter 7. I loved that Becky got Evan first. That kiss was hot, and even I couldn't get it out of my mind; so I like that it progressed. Unfortunately, I don't like the dark turn everything is taking. The father child molester is too far for me. I don't blame a guy for going after a hot babysitter, but forcing himself on his daughter and showing preference for the youngest available.. just getting too dark for me. Then there's the GoPro camera, which could lead to a lot of darkness too. Showing a shy person they are a slut or getting revenge against a hateful person makes for great blackmail stories; but blackmailing the hero is starting down a dark path. Although a twisted story of developed romance between the two, Becky the Depraved Dark and Evan the Light Hero, could be excellent. So far so good, I just hope you steer away from the darker stuff. I can't enjoy stories if they get too dramatic. |
| 2017-06-03 16:50:28 |
RUNNING into TROUBLE
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Lmao, saw it coming from a mile away, of course, but still enjoyed it. Bitches do that too! They act all non committal, go off on there own for long periods of time, might even date others during that time, then come back and freak out when the guy didn't realize a commitment had been made. Like learn to communicate ffs. |