| 2017-02-15 06:36:22 |
Potential Part 14
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Speaking of not being rushed, go faster! LoL |
| 2017-02-15 06:57:00 |
Confessions of a Cumstarved Mind_(1)
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Very Hot. I wish you wrote about it very slowly progressing further. Maybe even extend it to the story of next summer when Evan is out of the picture more again. Maybe this time Gray is even more reluctant. He feels as if he's being tortured by the teasing, and only agrees on conditions that slowly push Stephanie farther than she had ever intended to go. |
| 2017-02-17 16:29:23 |
Losing the Super Bowl - 2017
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Nope nope. REDO!! It was ok, but your Losing the Super Bowl 2015 was a masterpiece that I think about all time still. As soon as I saw that you posted a 2017 edition, I got so excited! I have been searching the net in anticipation of various versions of this story. I finally find one, and it's from the original Technician! The one who got me obsessed with their story to begin with! I felt like I was going to explode from anticipation just reading about the damn building. Then it missed the mark. Maybe my expectations were impossibly high, but it's been two years and this super bowl provided you with all the incentive to up an anti from the side that lost. It could be anything! The team part got good, and writing the emotions of the girls on the teams as the game progressed could have really led to some sparks. But.. so much was left unsaid. 2015 will remain one of my all time favorite stories, but want a redo on this one. I know you can do better! |
| 2017-02-23 04:16:25 |
Shannon gets Stuck
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Seen similar story before, but a new twist on something good is still good! I wish authors re-used good plot props like "stuck in a.dog door" more often. |
| 2017-05-21 23:19:29 |
Potential Part 18
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Just finished reading 17 and 18 back to back. I think I know how Evan felt at the end of 18.. Frustrated about not getting some already! Don't get me wrong, loved it! Jason's story is sort of a nice contrast. His story is like an example of what I don't want. Too much, too fast, but at least someone has been getting some lately. Somehow the mother edge just isn't doing anything for me. I think it's because Jason's mom is still a very blank character in my mind. There's definitely "Potential" there though! |