| 2015-02-22 01:48:55 |
My naked doppelganger (part 1)
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Mrs. Writer. Portals are likely very rare on Earth. Crossing through a Portal you could move you through time and geography. The Portal that opened with out a sound and no excess magnetism or electrical charge as portrayed in Sci Fi. I was in Sacramento, California and it was Spring. I carefully approached and then froze in place. No sound of autos, buses, children, birds, bees or humming birds. It felt like a memorial garden at a cemetery. Years later I realized I could have walked through to 1957 in San Diego, California I would be 8 years old with clothes that did not fit. |
| 2015-02-22 08:32:42 |
One Silent Night
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Merry Christmas to All |
| 2015-02-22 08:54:59 |
The babysitter returns part 2
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Hi horny pixy you posted this May 18, 2012. It is February 2015 I hope your formatting has improved. Maybe a friend to proof read for you ? There is no Editor at this site to help you. You are a talented & creative writer. |
| 2015-02-23 06:31:55 |
Special Chamber
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Your concept is good, your execution not good. I was confused with the similar named sisters. Consider any names such as Mary or Kathy in place of Sabrina.Please consider your readers and use use conventional, traditional paragraphs. Leave a blank line or space between paragraphs. I have seen this chaos of writing with others on this site. You are not the only one. |
| 2015-02-23 06:40:35 |
The Indian Maidens
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In the spirit of Comedy, I reported this as Other : Bad Writing to the Powers That Be. |