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Comments from Dudley Dowrong
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2018-07-30 12:07:05 | My New Friend by Docker5000 | It's a great little story. Not a lot of details on the action, but one can use the imagination to fill in the blanks. Not confirmed of the DP that Carol was promised nor that Lucy, Carol, & James did a trio, Was Michael fucking Jessica or just petting? These are 3 parts of the scenario that seem to make it incomplete Good closure with a fine epilogue. Also surprised that James didn't get a girl to date some. Of course he got all the sex he wanted or needed at "home" with Michael's Mom & Aunt. The girl would be a "trophy girl" for campus impressions.. More spacing could have been used to create better reading & story flow. Hope you keep writing. There is a lot going your way. Hope my suggestions help you on your next story. Have a friend read it before submission that you can trust to be honest ! |
| 2018-07-30 12:07:16 | My New Friend by Docker5000 | It's a great little story. Not a lot of details on the action, but one can use the imagination to fill in the blanks. Not confirmed of the DP that Carol was promised nor that Lucy, Carol, & James did a trio, Was Michael fucking Jessica or just petting? These are 3 parts of the scenario that seem to make it incomplete Good closure with a fine epilogue. Also surprised that James didn't get a girl to date some. Of course he got all the sex he wanted or needed at "home" with Michael's Mom & Aunt. The girl would be a "trophy girl" for campus impressions.. More spacing could have been used to create better reading & story flow. Hope you keep writing. There is a lot going your way. Hope my suggestions help you on your next story. Have a friend read it before submission that you can trust to be honest ! |
| 2018-07-30 12:21:52 | Mom's affair with friends dad | When I saw no paragraphs, little puncuation, & block form. No stoops; I didn't even start to read the story. I'm confident the scenario is good but the form of presentation is undesirable. Like a #10 girl that has been rolled around in the feed pin; probably great once cleaned up. |
| 2019-08-12 19:38:16 | A Second Life | Everything I read seems better than the last. How is that possible. I guess "this means War" would be the only story I don't want to go back read again. "Golden; Girls", G or No G Spot, "Slutty Virgins", Helping Josh, "Mulligan", & all the others I will go back to read again :& again. Looking thru to see if there is anything I've missed. Thank you for sharing your AWESOME talent on this site. Are there any others on which U post? U already have my email address. Thanks, Dudley |
| 2018-08-01 12:11:55 | MY T H R E E M O M S | I agree with previous comments; question about pregnant moms, too. Of course writers fiction/fantasy, can do anything reasoniblle or unreasoniblle. This author's name implies the direction of the story. He always does a good job at how delicately sexual touch between parents/children must be handled.casual or intimate I would really like to see a sequal with trio of Danni, Shanni., & Pete; another trio with Pete Dad, & Susie. Mention of it by Pete in naration has opened that door as a possibility.. Of course another trist with Pete coupled with Danni & Susie individually. The intrigue of secertcy will make it exciting, as well as your excellent details of the action Thank you for sharing your talent with us. |