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Comments from archrevenant
| Date | Story title | Comment |
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| 2009-05-05 00:39:17 | Boy's Sweet Boy-friend | Your dialogue is terrible and it sounds like English is not your first language, or you have a translator book or something. Punctuation could do with some attention aswell. |
| 2009-05-10 00:40:13 | Hi, i just re-read it and i realised it sounds like i resent the character of 'Michael'. I don't. I know i wrote everything in past tense but it was all just what i was feeling at the time. I love my brother and i dont want people (or him) to get the wrong idea about that from reading this story. We wont be having sex ever again though. But he's still my bro. | |
| 2009-05-12 01:28:05 | Well, this didnt actually happen to me. I just wish it did. It was a fantasy, and like most of my fantasies, i would never actually act on them. I hate hearing about rape and abuse so thats why i'd never actually have sex with an underage person or write an abusive story. I might write a part 2 to this story but it will be posted under a different title. Not "Showering with my little brother's friend Part II" | |
| 2009-05-16 16:57:56 | =) I think you rushed it after you made Carlos cum. Also, i find it easier if you write stories in Microsoft word, use spell check, then copy and paste the story on the site, its like cheating but not really, you just avoid the typos. I liked it though. |
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| 2009-05-20 23:04:15 | LOL, that's okay. I'm Bi but lately I've been, how did you put it..."confused" too? My sexual desire used to be 60% for girls but ive been 90% for guys lately so im wondering if im gay. Oh well. Why do you ask? |