| 2009-12-01 05:22:43 |
A Summer Friendship Part 2
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Good writing, story hits home in alot of places for me. |
| 2009-12-06 04:23:11 |
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I know! I dont understand! This is the kinda thing that all of the readers liked about my other stories so what's going on! |
| 2009-12-07 23:58:51 |
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Thanks, thats the kind of feedback i need. |
| 2010-03-23 20:35:47 |
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hahaa, i spelt muesli wrong. Sorry. |
| 2011-01-27 02:15:33 |
Twin Brothers... together
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Bit repetative in terms of phrasing. I would have also dropped the bracket bits, we get it, they're twins. It just made me not want to keep reading that's all. |