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Comments from WantSumCandyLittleGirl
| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2021-04-16 13:05:06 | Daughter Seducing Stepdad | Nice beginning to what should turn into a great finish. Only one request: check spelling. It’s barrier, not burier. There are other examples, but that one stands out. |
| 2021-04-19 23:56:06 | Naked Play Day | I’d love to let you drive my ‘Tang. Nice story, very well told. |
| 2021-05-24 23:45:38 | The houseguest 3 | This series is excellent, though there are possible writing improvements. Punctuation and dialogue are where the most attention is needed. As for doll1’s comment regarding Jacosta & Bill’s need to have a sit down discussion to open the windows to each of their sexual needs, I agree. Many couples have difficulty openly discussing sexual needs with each other, which is a sad state on modern sexuality. I am looking forward to seeing this story continue. |
| 2021-05-24 23:45:28 | The houseguest 3 | This series is excellent, though there are possible writing improvements. Punctuation and dialogue are where the most attention is needed. As for doll1’s comment regarding Jacosta & Bill’s need to have a sit down discussion to open the windows to each of their sexual needs, I agree. Many couples have difficulty openly discussing sexual needs with each other, which is a sad state on modern sexuality. I am looking forward to seeing this story continue. |
| 2021-05-10 22:46:21 | Siblings Desire | To echo working212, this story jumps between past and present tense. You need to choose to tell the story as it IS happening or as it DID happen. I would also suggest using a grammar checker (Grammarly is an excellent choice and is free) to help with spelling and punctuation. It was a good story, just needs a little work. |