| 2020-10-28 10:53:19 |
Leesa likes it big - Chapter 3
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This is the same story as Part 2. |
| 2020-11-20 01:41:22 |
Family Life 2 - David takes full control.
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Chapter 2 is a great addition; Laura is beginning to understand her position. Watch pronoun usage. Looking forward to Chapter 3. |
| 2020-11-12 19:17:38 |
One Long Airplane Ride
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This story isn’t any better the second time through. Too many inconsistencies, incorrect spelling of words, improper usage of adjectives and adverbs, no understanding of human anatomy, and does not have a cohesive plot. I echo the comments of Hugh Hardon in you probably plagiarized this; I’d look to find out where, but what’s the point. The site won’t take it down. Do us all a favor, own up to your inadequacies, tell the truth that you’re really a man posing as a woman, and quit writing awful, awful stories. |
| 2020-11-12 19:18:38 |
One Long Airplane Ride
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This story isn’t any better the second time through. Too many inconsistencies, incorrect spelling of words, improper usage of adjectives and adverbs, no understanding of human anatomy, and does not have a cohesive plot. I echo the comments of Hugh Hardon in you probably plagiarized this; I’d look to find out where, but what’s the point. The site won’t take it down. Do us all a favor, own up to your inadequacies, tell the truth that you’re really a man posing as a woman, and quit writing awful, awful stories. |
| 2020-11-18 21:38:20 |
Family Life 1 - How it started.
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Looking forward to the next chapter. There were a few typos, nothing horrid, so proofreading should help. |