| 2012-05-16 23:50:30 |
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Hi Twistedsister, this is a very interesting story that you had begun to write. I loved the fact that the main character, Jessinta, is a young girl that has a quite of few issues that many girls her age that don't have to deal with. The way the story is written, many readers including myself are getting a strong emotional vibe from reading this story. The lack of love from her parents and having to move from place to place, causing her to adventure off elsewhere. When she discovered the biker club hideout, it brings back good memories about the past. She looks to the bikers as her family, because they allowed her to spend time with them and look after her. The bikers showing her love that she couldn't get from home. Excellent written story so far! |
| 2012-05-17 01:44:29 |
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I wonder what Jessinta will do now that she got suspended? I see that you make it easier to read, even through I didn't had any problems reading this. I curious to see what will happen next. This story is developing pretty well so far. |
| 2012-05-17 02:03:51 |
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Wow, you have a little nice sex scene in this part! I felt this part was pretty short. I figured that Jessinta would had hung out with the biker gang most of the time or doing some exploring and make some money like she did in part 2 and 3 of the story. Like I said this part is good, but it was too short in my opinion. I definitely voted positive on every part so far. |
| 2012-05-30 00:32:21 |
JESINTA 6 - 16a (Boxing Gym)
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twistedsister, I loved that you took Jesinta's focus away from the biker gang and the v.p. for a minute. I see that you had Jesinta introduced us to a new character in the school. The oral scene with Jesinta and Jimmy was awesome as well. I am liking the direction that this series has taken so far. |
| 2012-06-04 00:01:16 |
CAW#11 - Cold Winters Day (re-editted)II
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Well this story kind of have that cold eerie feeling to it. Well as a reader, I know this female, who is 5'7" and 103 pounds had to go through some kind of abuse in her past. But, I wasn't expecting her to do what she did to the guy and the other 4 victims who didn't knew about her past. The ending was so unexpected, but I kind of like it. I know that this is a CAW 11 entry, but I would love a continuation of this story, or a pre sequel to give the reader more insight into her past. (I hope that you're understanding what I"m saying.) |