| 2012-05-01 00:13:23 |
Lake Tannin
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Just great. Loved it. |
| 2012-05-07 15:29:19 |
The Island_(1)
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You have started a good story of intrigue. Leaves us wondering where we go next. Well written and layed out. Keep going, I would love to know who the father is, and probably two very gorgeous sisters coming. |
| 2012-05-07 15:45:18 |
My Beautiful Brother David
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Yes, you did repeat a little too much. But the story was great. You brought out her insecurities and fears and her desire to feel like a full woman. I know she will have her brother help her. That could be some hot scenes. |
| 2012-05-31 13:48:20 |
A Journey to the Amazon
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That was an amazing story. I loved it. Well written and posted. I hope you do a sequel. Since I have spent many years living near the jungle and the indigenous people, (Maya), I feel a connection to this tribe and their way of life. Even if most of this is fantasy, you made it real and lifelike. Thanks for the adventure. Please continue. |
| 2012-05-31 21:05:17 |
THE MOON STONE
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I think it was great. A few spelling errors but they did not detract from the story. I can envision many more directions to take this. You use the one you like best. This is a great start. No sex does not make a bad story. However you may get slammed by the pervs who complain no one got pregnant, no underage sex, etc. Very different from the usual and, to me, interesting. |