| 2012-06-07 22:45:23 |
GIRL WHO CAME BACK
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I have got to tell you that was an amazing story. Emotion and love and memories all tied together. There is nothing wrong with falling in love with Amy. They already had a close relationship before. Who better to share your life with than somebody who knows all the past and the heartache. Maybe some time with Sarah, who is his age will help him to know his true feelings and that love has no age. Stick to the title and continue with the idea,,,, She came back! |
| 2012-06-19 19:49:59 |
CAW#11 - Cold Winters Day (re-editted)
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I voted positive too. I don't know why it is rated so low. I loved the story. It is one of my favorites. I did flinch a little at the end. Serves him right for calling her a bitch. Keep writing, I will keep voting positive. |
| 2012-06-20 18:46:52 |
The Ten of Them. Chapter 1
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I think the idea of the story is great. It appears that the authors first language is not english. Yes, there are an incredible amount of mistakes. But if you read between the lines, it is an interesting story. I wish I could live like this. |
| 2012-06-20 19:57:57 |
The Ten of Them Chapter 2
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As I said before, I love the storyline. If you read between the lines and the errors, it is very interesting. It is posted well with easy to read dialog. Please don't take the comments negatively. We just want you to get better. I am not a writer and any thing I would post would be pur shit. You have a great story, keep going. |
| 2012-06-20 21:00:27 |
The Ten of Them Chapter 3
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A little better with this chapter. The amount of money mentioned may be a little fantasy, but the whole story is fantasy. Still love the story line. Very romantic with the hints of sex to come. Very good. |