| 2012-03-21 10:45:43 |
A summer in Oregon, Part One
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I don't know why some people think that ranching, hunting, camping, etc. are only manly activities. My very femenine daughter, who happens to live in Oregon, is a better hunter than most men I know. She can outshoot most of her male friends. It has to be difficult for someone who is mixed gendered to live with people who are predudiced or unwilling to understand. Good start to this story, Hope to follow up with part two. Good luck. |
| 2012-03-21 17:56:53 |
Dream girl_(0)
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Actually that was a good story. A little short and could use more character development. But it had the feelings of a wife who is feeling neglected and her fantasies. We all have some like this. A dream lover who fulfills all our desires. Keep writing. |
| 2012-03-23 10:43:26 |
Handyman
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John. That was an amazing story. Not enough adjectives to describe it. Sexy, romantic, sensual., caring, interesting. A good blend of romance and humor. Thanks for showing how good an experienced male can make a woman enjoy her first, or hundreth, time. I enjoyed your other story, Moving In. Both were done in this theme of true, caring, and enjoyable relationships.Sex in a story is great, but when done with taste,(ahem) it is terrific. You can put it into words very well. Good job. |
| 2012-03-24 14:45:15 |
DR. Jekyll and Ms. Heidi
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Now that is a different story line. You are probably not far off from genetic research like this. I wonder what it would be like for a man to be a woman for a day. You almost made it real. Thanks for something different. Is there a part 2? The daughter has plans. |
| 2012-03-26 10:51:43 |
THE FIRST TIME COUPLE: Part 5
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Hey Douggie. Another great chapter. I like it that little petite Marie, and not the brawler Andy, that kicks the s--t out of the bully. Never piss off a woman. To be a little nit-picky, the first few scenes where they start seducing their partners, the actions were a little rushed. You did better later on, and the scenes were more complete and well described. Your whole presentation of first time love was remarkably well done. You kept the nervousness and anxiety as part of the process, and still allowing the passion and lust to rule. In words... it does sound technical, but in reality it is as you described it..."fucking amazing." And as always your spelling, punctuation, and presentation are mistake proof. Perfect. Good writing Douggie. I am trying not to be critical, but to try and help. I know, all the expert advice is from a non-writer. But you really do a great job. |