| 2015-10-05 22:43:34 |
A Family Betrayal Chapter 10
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Proofreader? Editor? You have to be joking. So many mistakes in the last two chapters that it is hardly readable. |
| 2015-10-04 22:58:54 |
Housesitting Day 0: Chapter 1: Blowjob Wake Up (Edited)
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I only read the first PARAGRAPH and realised that this story would be nothing but crap and sex.... |
| 2015-10-12 01:15:39 |
controlling the town(2)
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a reasonable story but way too repetitive with the sexual parts. |
| 2015-11-01 21:14:24 |
THE BLEMS 4_(0)
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Hello pars,, sincerely hope that you continue this series, a little disjointed at times, but that seems to add to the story instead of making seem too ridiculous. |
| 2015-10-21 20:46:22 |
Twin Japanese Nieces Pt12
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You have the nerve to call this a true story? what is the legal age for consensual sex in the U.S.A. 10 years old? an enjoyable story but at the least give it a true category, something like, (absolutely unbelievable stories) |