| 2015-11-04 21:20:09 |
A evening at the fair
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saw a big block of writing and turned off, did not even try to read it. |
| 2015-11-05 15:33:56 |
Chapter 4 of Swinging in the Neighborhood (Fun With Terri and Carrie)
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This chapter just about killed the story for me, just sex, sex and more sex, hardly worth reading.. |
| 2015-11-17 06:09:58 |
What a Deal! Chapter 8_(1)
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you just took this story from the sublime to the fucking downright bloody ridiculous. |
| 2015-11-15 20:45:14 |
Just Your Average Story II
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This is worse than chapter 1, just a load of disjointed rubbish. Cant be bothered with the rest of so called story. |
| 2015-12-07 06:03:40 |
Mother With The Hots_(1)
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Story would have been much better with far less sex and more plot and build up, basically just repeating sex scenes in different places. |