| 2016-01-15 23:11:20 |
Jack's new life Part 2
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Your right, story too short, needs fleshing out, reasonable premise, BUT, a 2 minute read does not make a story worth the effort of reading it.. |
| 2016-01-17 22:04:02 |
Titcage (Chapter 1)
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what a load of absolute garbage, this is not a story, just some idiots stupid ideas, I only read for 2 minutes and decided that I would not even try to make sense of it, as I said before, ABSOLUTE GARBAGE.. |
| 2016-01-18 01:52:33 |
Whoa! Jenny's New Training Method VII
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EACH CHAPTER IS THE SAME AS THE OTHER, ONLY THE NAMES CHANGE, DONT NEED TO READ THE REST, JUST THE SAMO SAMO SCENES, NEEDS TO HAVE SOME VARIATION TO SAY THE LEAST.. |
| 2016-01-22 21:17:57 |
Whoa! Ginger's Visit VI
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JUST ABOUT EXACTLY THE SAME AS THE PREVIOUS CHAPTERS, ONLY THE GIRLS NAMES CHANGE, I REALLY THOUGHT THAT YOU WERE A BETTER WRITER THAN THIS.... |
| 2016-01-30 09:08:31 |
A guy and his....? 19 Unstoppable
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the chapters are getting smaller and smaller, at this rate they will only be 1 or 2 paragraphs, you should flesh them out a lot more. |