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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2013-04-18 09:42:44 | ghost boy part seven jayrich_(6) | Ok; not the worst I've ever seen. It is intelligible, I'll give you that. While entertainment value may be lacking, it could be promising with some polishing and expanded thought. Still, look at the website you're on. Somehow I don't think that you're reaching your target audience. |
| 2013-04-18 09:50:48 | The day it happend | One large paragraph laced with profanity, irrelevant sentences and incomprehensible speech patterns. Why did you even try? Perhaps if you had given this to a mentally handicapped preschool child, they could have typed it and done a better job or at least edited it for you. I mean, what happened? Did you pass out while writing the introduction and your face rolled on the keyboard and this was the result? I would attribute your failed attempt at writing to such an event, but there are too many actual words in there to leave it to chance. To me, this means that, sadly enough, you were actually conscious of what was appearing on the screen while your fingers were typing. Just pure trash. |
| 2013-04-18 09:55:50 | Deseray's Day_(5) | Honestly, what the hell is this? Did you wipe your ejaculate covered hand across the keyboard a few times and this utter nonsense magically appeared? Then, mistakenly deciding that this terrible, incomprehensible mound of horse shit was a story, you actually decided to click the 'post' button? You were shaken as a baby, weren't you? |
| 2013-04-18 10:01:43 | stepfather sedution l | What's to sort here, Wistful? Asking to sort it means it's possible to discern between what is salvageable and what simply needs to be discarded. It ALL needs to be discarded. There's absolutely nothing useful here. How does the useless waste of brain matter that wrote this 'story' remember to do some of the more complicated things in life...like defecate? |
| 2013-04-18 10:33:34 | The Locusts | I started wondering where I'd seen this before, but then I realized that you posted this a second time elsewhere. Why in the HELL would you 'edit' this? I mean, what in the hell is there to edit? Did you honestly feel so accomplished and did such a great job that you needed to subject us to the misery a second time? Both times are such absolute trash that it's difficult to decide which one is worse. For more critical analysis of this sludge covered waste of brain power, see his 'edited' version. |