| 2020-08-10 03:02:53 |
MIXED MARRIAGE
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I'm very much impressed how you wrote this story with such care and detail. Very well done. Bravo! |
| 2020-08-13 09:23:36 |
Family Trip to Jamaica
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Well written and I loved the dialogue. Very natural and not over the top. A nice introduction to this story. On to part 2. |
| 2020-08-13 09:39:31 |
Family trip to Jamaica Part 2
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Very, very well crafted storyline with believability. You have a fan in me. |
| 2020-08-14 14:48:41 |
Family Trip to Jamaica Part 3
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A coupe of typos but nonetheless another fine chapter. I'm not sure how I feel about the next chapter coming from dad's perspective. I think you struck gold with this story for how it is being told from Jason's point of view. Don't mess up the formula, but it's just one man's opinion. |
| 2020-08-14 20:19:07 |
What a Difference a Summer Makes- Part 4C
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It's coming along nicely. 10-pages in. |