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| Date | Story title | Comment |
|---|---|---|
| 2019-05-02 12:15:29 | Club Slut Redemption | Some places were confusing. Allison, (I thought) stepped out of the stall & invited girls over after she peed all over Linda It seemed though Allison was being aggressively "feed pussy" on the stall floor. Then in the latter scene, who was the guy dancing fingering Who on the dance floor but leaves to go to the restroom? Then Allison steps in to stop him (who). I enjoyed "The hunters" and it was understandable. Some how, more than once I got lost in this one; characters got mixed up & seemed out of place. I missed it. A good primes & story (set up). Good technical work (grammar, syntax, paragraphs, spelling, etc.) Sorry I lost something in character placement. As an author, U shouldn't let that happen. |
| 2019-05-02 13:39:30 | Over the Waterfall | Thank you for sharing Ur talent. This was much easier to follow than "Club Slut Redemption" I'm going to have to read it again to see where I got mixed up. That is out of Ur writing skills to get me mixed up like that. Everything else has been easy to follow & understand. Good character revelation & building right along. No confusion except that one story. Enjoyed it except for the mixup that I made. From the begening of Steven meeting Jesse, the "joining" hung "in the air & between the lines". It was to be just a matter of time. Jen was the spark that got the fire raging from all the tension that was apparent. Personally, I know that when one U care for so much passed on, the first reaction is to try to find comfort, When my 1st wife died, I called a female friend that I thought would help me thru it & she did it more than once. It felt so good when I made her orgasm on my dick. I don''t think anyone had ever eaten her pussy & she was over 40 (I was 50). |
| 2019-05-02 14:09:25 | Over the Waterfall | Melanieatplay, U've really caught my attention. I am an old man (77), & would like to write some of my life "works" (confession, memories, what ever to call them) I'm not how much U contributed to "The Hunters", but I can "guestimate' most of the Mel action with Taylor were Ur ideas of virgin seduction. U R a very nice lady to be as encouraging to someone like Taylor that needed that confidence. So much truism in that story (I remember my first time after 60 yrs). I too needed encouragement & it helped a lot. I also needed more help from Jim who was not there for me, like Taylor. I would really like to connect with U for some help getting started. Researching Ur name hasn't revealed anything. Maybe later. |
| 2019-05-02 19:57:50 | My Sister and Her Friends (Part 2) | Glad at least U, Mrs A, David, Michele & Viickie (with Tiny) made it thru the years. Sorry about Ur Mom & Nessa . I'm sure that wasn't easy for any of U. At 77 I would surely like to know what happened to some of the lovers & acquaintaces of the past.. I never physically did to my mother as in this story, but my mothers jealousy & attitude wedged between any closeness we could have shared. The fact my oldest sister was born Oct 1 after the Feb 24th marriage didn't generate any respect for her either . She lied to me, & showed disrespect for my wife before & after the marriage. No points there. Yet, she was my Mother. And now I tear up 40 yrs after her passing. We saw each nude many times in my teen yrs but her nearly 300#, 5' even appearance never did anything for me. She never did anything but to kiss my cheek, & hug me. Dad was hardly ever around until I was in college. I really liked the presentation U made of this scenario. Last words tells how "things" are.!! |
| 2019-05-02 23:39:20 | Perchance To Dream | I screwed up again & all my wonderful comments are lost somewhere out in cyberspace. I love love stories, especially when the love is expressed properly. like Mel & Dad. |