| 2012-06-08 16:24:38 |
Tale of the Elves - Chapter One - Life is Precious
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One thing that popped in my head, if I start a story where the main character's name is unknown in the beginning, I find it jarring when all of a sudden, in the middle of a fight scene, we know his name without anything to bring it on. Usually I wait for an introduction, or I have the character talk to himself. Maybe while hiding in the bushes, he mutters to himself and uses his own name, that way it's not "He's a man, oh wait, now he's Arealam." It does go kind of fast, and the characters don't really feel real. It's important to make sure you know what kind of a story format your writing in and keep to it. There is "God mode" where you know every thought of every character, "Single player mode" where you know every thought and move of a single character but still third person. "First person shooter" is inside their head, using "I did" "I saw" "I broke his neck." A lot of people tend to forget which mode they are writing in.And yes I'm a nerd. It's why I write scifantasy. Good luck! |
| 2012-06-11 08:10:26 |
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LOL, go ahead and steal me. Pay for my living expenses and I would happy to write. I really want to write 100% for a living, but alas, I must work and that means when I work I don't write. La sigh. |
| 2012-11-25 23:50:26 |
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Who the fuck are you? I am not Ms N. I am Cly. Where do you get off in calling me "Ms N?" And how would you know how I fuck? Not that I am denying the statement, but few of those I've slept with have even read my stories, and certainly not on this site. What would possess you to even think to say such a statement? Are you my online lesbian stalker? |
| 2013-08-23 19:38:00 |
WoW Darkmoon Happy Endings
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It was OK. The sex part could have been longer, but then again, I tend to make mine a little short as well. This story lacked something, and I can't put my finger on it. It had good detail, and a back story, and whatnot. The grammar and spelling were good enough, much better than most others on this site. I just didn't get sucked in. But I did finish it. Would have been awesome if the paladins got their asses kicked at the end. Good job over all! |
| 2014-07-22 02:39:32 |
The Enemy's Bitch
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To the anonymous reader who wanted knotting furries, yes, I have written about furries having more animal traits. The thing is, I have not yet described how there are some more human and others more animal. It depends on which host the Were Virus infected first, an animal or a human. Anubis just happens to have more human. |