| 2012-07-27 03:24:04 |
Loving my sister Chapter1
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Beautiful first story Pandora, and please take no notice of the brain dead morons who want you to get everyone pregnant. One suggestion is to double space between paragraphs - it makes the stories much easier to read. Positive vote and personal 8/10 which would have been 9.5/10 if better spaced. |
| 2012-07-31 19:03:43 |
A rapist's desire
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Beautiful, Pandora. Although the subject matter (Rape) leaves me cold, it IS only a fantasy after all, and you have written it well, with great spacing and imagination. Well done Girl. Positive vote and personal grading 8.5/10. |
| 2012-07-31 19:15:28 |
Lil Sis 1
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Sorry Zidez, but if you put up a story it's going to get both sorts of criticism, however in this case, I'll be nice. Only real problem is not double-spacing between the paragraphs. (Makes the story a LOT easier to read) If in doubt read Pandora's first and second stories and notice the huge difference. Positive Vote and personal grade 7/10 |
| 2012-08-06 21:48:55 |
Me and mom, Under the covers, In the cold (Ch1 Rewritten)
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Spelling is terrible, layout is strange, and this doesn't even count as an appetiser, let alone a story. God save your country's educational system because it can't save itself. |
| 2012-08-17 18:00:07 |
A MORAL DILEMMA
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Probably the BEST first story I have ever read, and I have read plenty. Eagerly anticipating the second chapter. Thanks John. |