| 2013-07-07 12:25:41 |
HOTTUB HEAVEN, THE CONTINUATION
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I have only one complaint, the story ended too soon. I want more, and more, and more.You are a very talented writer and could have a great future (maybe you already do). Please be sure you Copywright all of your work because if you don;t someone else will and they will make good money off of it. Please keep up the good work and maybe add a few chapters to this story.. Thanks, Bob |
| 2013-07-13 12:27:32 |
Lingerie Marketing
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This was a fine first attempt at writing and you should continue with even more stories. A main concern is your not forming paragraphs which will make your story more readable. This is a common error of early writers. Keep up the good work. Thank you. |
| 2013-07-14 15:33:50 |
With an older man
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What a beautiful, very well written story. This was well done and a just rite lenght. Sadly, the way you have written it you have shot any chance of any more chapters. Always think first; might I want to continue with more chapters ?? Good Luck !!! |
| 2013-07-17 14:17:40 |
Student Painter
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Wooopsss ! My login got up and left, SORRY !! That was me suggesting a chapter 2 . |
| 2013-07-17 14:32:56 |
A Dad & A Husband
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I can't describe how truely beautiful this story is. I'll be 80 on my next birthday but I couldn't stop crying on the beauty you have written. I stored it in my profile. Thank you very much. (countrycadillac) |