| 2019-04-06 12:11:58 |
My downward spiral to a becoming a slut.
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Ur writing skills are outstanding. I wonder if some material U submit under a different name, because Ur skills seem to match hers.Ur detailed descriptions of the "action" is like "making the reader feel he/she is really there experiencing the exhilration or humiliation of the situation. The mark of an excellent author, be it writen or visual ( a book, movie, or play) |
| 2019-04-06 19:21:01 |
My downward spiral to a becoming a slut. Chapter 2
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Vivid as usual, questionable content for a young girl to be abused in such a way, but I'm sure there a few conceited assholes like Scott, Mike & Billy that would take full advantage of a drunk girl. I'm surprised that a face fuck is all that happened !! Ur descriptions are vivid & disgusting and as I heard previously, very realistic. I'm surprised Tori lasted as long as she did without getting sick (if it weren't fiction)... |
| 2019-04-06 23:48:52 |
My downward spiral to a becoming a slut Chapter 4
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U need to present this (including Ch 2 [Can't find]), 2 Versions, 1 with all the descriptions here & (2)another implying the sexual actions without the erotic details. The 2 book versions should make U a mint + !! The material in this chapter is much more acceptable than the force Scott has abused Tori. If Scott had been more like Elizabeth, Tori would have felt so much better about herself & the relationship she shares with Scott.(And his friends). The story would still have been just as hot because of Ur talent to place the readers in the middle of the action (How do you do that?) Looking to the continued episodes... |
| 2019-04-07 11:59:12 |
My downward spiral to a becoming a slut Chapter 6 – Facing the truth.
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This is a good example of the "Love is Blind" thing !! "I love You" the 3 easiest words to say, but difficult to fulfill. Love should mean putting the object of love above all else. "What's fo I get out of it?" should be the last thought; "What's best for my love?" should be the 1st. She is giving, he's taking; no sharing except what Tori generates in her own mind after the event. |
| 2019-04-07 11:59:38 |
My downward spiral to a becoming a slut Chapter 6 – Facing the truth.
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This is a good example of the "Love is Blind" thing !! "I love You" the 3 easiest words to say, but difficult to fulfill. Love should mean putting the object of love above all else. "What's fo I get out of it?" should be the last thought; "What's best for my love?" should be the 1st. She is giving, he's taking; no sharing except what Tori generates in her own mind after the event. |