| 2019-01-27 02:31:48 |
The Rocker Part 3_(5)
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Beautiful! What I love about this story of teenage struggle, heartbreak, disappointment, love and becoming an adult is the drama you so skillfully craft into the story. The story is not just about teenagers fucking. We all were at that age once and if my experience was like most teenagers of my generation we certainly did fuck a lot! But we had lives apart from the sex. You capture the drama of every day teenage life very skillfully. |
| 2019-01-27 03:20:30 |
The Chauffeur(#3)...... First Day/ Jill
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EXCELLENTE! This is more like it. Very well laid out plot, with just the right amount of sex play. Everything very plausible. You are doing an awesome job in fleshing out the characters. This chapter is much superior to the previous one. You have me hooked. |
| 2019-01-27 03:46:08 |
The Pissing Corduroy Orgy part 1
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Very imaginative story. I am curious as to where you will take it from here? I have enjoyed conventional piss play, however do not understand the idea behind the activity described in this story. Perhaps in a future chapter you can explain the exact purpose and how pleasure is derived from the specific act described here? |
| 2019-01-27 23:19:26 |
Sis Watches
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Excelent first story. One small detail that rather disturbes me is you used the name Paula in referring to Karen the sister! Perhaps you posted this story to another forum and changed the names of the characters in order to post here at XN. In doing so you missed one name change. I very much enjoyed this tale of teenage sexual exploration as the plot is very plausible. A scene very similar to the one described in this story actually happen with me! Though I chose to not post on this site I do post my stories on other free and pay erotic stories sites. With your talent I hope you will show us more of your craft. THANKS! |
| 2019-01-27 23:27:09 |
Sis Watches
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My apologies, I notice this is not your first story as I found your post from 2013. Regardless this rendering is outstanding and I probably speak for the other readers of this story in saying we hope you will post more in this genre! |